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作者：芦笛 在 罕见奇谈 发贴, 来自 http://www.hjclub.org
Very good sentence. Still, perhaps it can be improved a little.
"Many people read you, and many people clicked your post of the free
english lesson you gave it to me,so they could know the story about
Zhang, which I was trying to tell."
better to be:
Because many people read your articles, they read the free English
lesson you gave me (note, you cannot use "it" there, because "lesson"
is already the object of the verb "gave"). As a result, they came to
know the story about Zhang, which I was trying to tell.
My congratulations! Look, your trick has worked! I bet people's
curiosity will be triggered by your "bad news", especially by my
exclamation that it broke my heart. Then they will click your article to
find out what the bad news was. By the end of the day, perhaps you can
get more than 200 clicks. Ha! Ha!
作者：芦笛 在 罕见奇谈 发贴, 来自 http://www.hjclub.org |
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Bad news. Bad news.
